*Dusts of knuckes*
Hello there, I'm Kasei, writer, critique, and lover of doritos. I'm going to go ahead and give Ryder here a nice 'ol review. There's not a whole lot to look at on this page, so this should be nice and quick.
I'll start by congratulating you; his design at least (to my knowledge) is original; he kind of looks like a male stripper, but at least he's not just a red Sonic. You've already made me like him more than like, 70% of the characters I've looked at here. Good job, you get a muffin for your troubles.
Other than that, we've got an adventurous, reckless daredevil who doesn't work well in a team despite having been in a team, which makes him seem just a bit 'edgy', which isn't a "negative" quality so much as a "teen" quality, and surprise, he's 16, right on the ball here, aren't we?
Now I would love to spend like, eight more paragraphs dedicated to giving you excruciating details about why I hate everything there is about this guys power list, how I detest his unexplained chaos control powers and his eight million super forms - but you don't have those. Good job. You don't have anything else, either. Bad job. Work in that nifty sword he has and you've almost got a skillset.
Thanks a bunch! ^^~Nikki-Kaji 01:05, February 28, 2014 (UTC)
4'5 is kinda tall for a 16-year-old mobian..... ♪Pianoteen♪ 02:58, February 28, 2014 (UTC)