Talk:Unity/Prologue: The Multiverse Theory/@comment-27601199-20180315155457/@comment-27601199-20180315231225

I'm serious.

But if you don't trust me, I'd suggest you read over what you have so far out loud and see if it all sounds natural.

And other than the prose there's at least three errors I could immediately spot and the dialogue chunks which need to be broken up.