Talk:Chronicles of Damien/Story/@comment-32712012-20180103205631

Interesting story!

Have you considered moving this into script format? That might make it easier to understand what's going on. For example:

Before: "Tails asks how and Damien explains to him that if he were to explain, not even the mind of the (as he calls him) 'The Great Miles Prower' would know."

After: TAILS: But...how did you hack into the robot?

DAMIEN: If I were to explain, not even the mind of the great Miles Prower could understand.

This is just an example. You don't have to take my suggestion, and if you do, you don't have to change that segment the way I suggested. This is just meant to demonstrate the sort of thing I'm talking about. (Also, if you're trying to make Damien/EXE have creepy lines, you could probably do that better in script format.)

Again, interesting story!