User blog comment:Detective SkullWolf/Character Critique Requests/@comment-3027456-20140305161542/@comment-27765057-20140526154506

I believe I promised a review. Well, here it is.

General Stuff: I think you should have added one of those summaries of the character at the top of the page. I personally had no idea what I was getting into here, so I think that writing one would have helped out. Just a suggestion.

History: Upon my first read-through of this, I was admittedly confused. From what I got from reading, I had the impression that Ember's father was essentially trying to make the world's most effective flashdrive. It did not really clarify what the purpose of giving Camilo intelligence was, in that case. Also, other than Camilo's own creation, I really don't know much more about Camilo history-wise. I think you should write more about him.

Abilities: This section is nonexistent...you should write it.

Personality: I'd like to make a suggestion. If Camilo did indeed code his own emotions, then I think it would make a lot of sense if he based it off of someone, perhaps a former assistant in Camilo's creation. Just throwing that out there.

Appearance: "Minks are cool." Indeed.

Conclusion: For the first review after my break, I felt that this one was, sadly, a bit underwhelming. I think it is mostly because there is not much written for this character. There is nothing actually wrong with the character, but the page itself could use more information so that we can understand the character more.