User blog:ApolloFlare/What Do You Guys Think

I want an opinion (good or bad idc) on my plot for my Hack Game is it to complexed or does it explains to much? i need an answer. Here is my Plot:

In the past there have been groups of people that have been many groups of people that have gotten close to world domination and some even a catastrophe that would destroy the fabric of the universe.....The first was Team Rocket, a normal band of crooks and criminals lead by their mastermind and former Kanto Gym Leader: Giovanni. Then there was Teams Magma and Aqua of the Hoenn Region, Team Galactic of Sinnoh and lastly Team Plasma of the Unova Region.

In order to avoid anymore groups like the former from being started, the Pokemon Rangers have decided to stop their services in order to create a new band of protectors called The NPS, The National Pokemon Squad.

In this story you are a young Boy/Girl who's father, Nex Leoheim, is a top ranking member, who is also very well respected and followed member of the NPS. When You were 9 he left for a mission to stop a group of criminals who have been at war with the NPS for the past 7 YEARS. He did not return.... 7 years later you obtained his old PokeCom (Pokemon Computer) and was also told that he is announced dead............You mother is now in a state of madness, getting her self pregnant with you kid sister who was born when you turned 24.

The gang has not given up thier war even after the arrest of thier first leader years ago.....

You are now 18 years old and have decided to join the NPS to take your father's place.....but was simply turned down by his former and closest friend who was now the President of the NPS, because he didnt want your mother to worry about you....

In order to get into the NPS Now is to show your strength to them by becoming the Pokemon Champion of The Kaior Region..........

Will the young hero reach his goal? What Really Happened to your father? This is the Start of your Destiny.....

Now what i needed help in is this: To make this story not sounding a little to...ehhhhh complexed...cause im also making a game based off of this story/RP and i kinda want people not to be over whelmed with it....so any suggestions and advice to give me please tell me

(and please dont point out grammar and word mistakes for i have checked this Plot Over and over again)