Talk:Georgette the Seagull

Reviews? In my wiki!?
Hello Delightball; allow me to introduce myself as Kasei, and while I'm not exactly an old member of this wiki, I am returning to it in an effort to be more active in the community and with storytelling as a whole. As a result, over the next few weeks I'll be doing reviews such as this one.

Now, you may be asking; 'wtf is this guy doing?' Well, that's simple; I clicked that little Recent Changes button to the side, looking for a character to write a review on, and miss Georgette here is the only one I saw on the list that wasn't half-assed, congratulations! Regardless, this is something I do as a way to kill time, nothing more. You can choose to take this review to heart, rebuke it, or ignore it entirely; the choice is yours. That said, I believe it's time to begin by going down the page.

Let's get down to it.
The best part about pages like this? Short pages = short reviews. The bad part? Short pages = less info = more questions than critique. So yeah, I'll just address each question/concern as I find it.

The first and (in my honest opinion) most important section to review is the "Power/ability" section of a character's page, and Georgette's seems pretty straightforward. No "better than sonic" speed, no "omg 8 super transformations", and no "Chaos controllllllllll", something I'm quite happy to not see on a character page. Why? People tend to just throw those powers in without an explanation, and it hurts my pride when some writers give genuine, detailed back-stories to explain their characters powers, while others just give them whatever.

Which brings us to the first (of many) question(s); what is the origin of her dimension traveling ability? In addition; what are its' limits, parameters? How is it done/how does it appear? You've given her an ability rarely-seen on this wiki, one that lets her (feasibly) appear in pretty much any Roleplay. This is good for character development and (if used correctly) can help you tie together many different writer's stories. Still, I'd feel better knowing WHAT the power is, exactly, rather than just seeing that she can do something; comprehending it would be more appreciated for your readers.

She has martial arts skills? Impressive, but how did she acquire them? Was she trained, or did she just magically have them from birth? To what extent is her mastery, and in what particular martial art? Again, explaining the reason for this greatly increases an individual readers' interest in a character (just try not to go overboard with the story, here).

Finally: Glowing eyes? Do they serve a purpose? If not, it's just an aesthetic thing you're using to make your bird look more "cool/original" (select one). Get rid of that little tidbit if you're not going anywhere with it.

Now then, I'm going to cover her backstory/personality in one go, since they total all of 3 sentences (not a good sign, *hint*). Ok so; she exists in the future, but how far? Silver's time? Before, or after? How did so many time travelers come about? For personality; what is her original reason for seeking out knowledge and (again), how is she doing it?

I'm afraid my time here is up (and there's not much else to work with), so I'm going to close this review out for today.

Remember when I said it'd be short? I lied. --火星 'Wages'War 17:19, September 29, 2013 (UTC)