User blog comment:CelestialSun/Character Reviews/@comment-1587581-20120823144325/@comment-1910960-20120823150559

Sure thing. Also I forgot to tell you guys that these reviews are quite opinionated. --- Okay, no picture, but that's absolutely fine because there's a description of his appearance. It sounds good, but maybe you could go into detail some more. Hairstyle, possible scars, any abnormal physical traits, etc. Things like that give depth to a character. I really like how you have that army thing going on- his armor is descriptive.

Backstory. It's interesting, but in my very honest opinion it seems kind of rushed (dont count on that being reliable, because I dont know why it seems like that). Something that confuses me: Why did he go beserk when he arrived at the orphanage? What grinded his gears so badly to make him have the urge to kill absolutely everyone there? I can understand if maybe he was in intense shock, but when you're left abandoned in such a way, they dont ship you off to an orphanage in such a quick amount of time, so I can imagine he should've calmed down at least a bit (but of course still grieving and angry?) Also, perhaps you could delve deeper into the Hopstick Clan? It seems interesting but I don't see much information other than it's supposed strength.

Abilities. I really like that "Rear Sensor" one, it is very fitting for his species. Full blown time manipulation is an extremely powerful ability to have, maybe over-powered. In my opinion that should only be giving to characters retaining a very, very high status (God like, almost). So maybe you want to think about that. That Power Chomp ability seems kinda cool in my opinion. To balance it out though, maybe he could feel the idea of eating a body part to be, I dunno, kinda gross? The rest is fine.

Personality. I kinda like it, y'know. We've got the basics of it, though. Perhaps you could write more about his hobbies, what activities he does with his comrades, maybe put up a Likes/Dislikes/Fears section?

That's all I pretty much have for now. Hope you enjoyed-