Board Thread:Article Critique/@comment-7371650-20150720214916

Hey, long time, no see! [Watches everyone facepalm with a grin on his face.] I've been heavily considering coming back to a non-parody Sonic the Hedgehog fan fiction. It's an action comedy currently titled The Supreme Toot Toot Sonic Warrior Show to complement the Sonic Boom T.V. series. It's still in the brainstorming stages, so I haven't created an article for it yet. I apologize if that breaks some sort of policy, but I really wasn't sure where else to get critiques for something Sonic-related. I'll be breaking this message into sections, but first a couple of things to keep in mind.

1.) This is an alternate universe story. Most of you are probably familiar with an alternate universe story, so I'll keep this short. If you see something that contradicts a major Sonic game, it probably does, but I don't care. Also, I may change the personality of each character to some degree---the more minor the character, the more creative liberties.

2.) Most of this brainstorming was done in the past few days. Don't be afraid to speak up if something doesn't make sense, but break it to me gently if you can.

Shadow the Hedgehog
I would start with the protagonist, but I haven't had many ideas for Sonic's character, other than stuff that was established in already-existing continuities (ie Sonic the Hedgehog the Movie). Onward, Shadow will probably be given the most creative liberties out of any main character. He appears a lot earlier on in this story than he does in the actual games. I'm heavily considering introducing him in the loose adaptation of Sonic 1.

In this story, Shadow is a good guy, but there's a catch. He can push himself farther than he should, and the more he pushes his abilities beyond their limit, the more unstable he'll become, eventually being overcome by evil ideals. In other words, he becomes more and more like a different person the more he pushes himself. I've considered the following idea: the only thing that can bring him back to normal is pain, meaning either Sonic will have to beat up his ally or Shadow will have to let the bad guy hit him a few times to keep himself sane. Please note that Shadow's normal self still isn't exactly cheerful, but he at least feels he must side with Sonic to save the Earth. No, I won't be calling it Sonic's World. Sega has the right to call it what they want, but I'm going to keep calling it Earth.

Dr. Eggman
The antagonist of this series is named Dr. Eggman, of course, but Sonic continuously calls him "Robotnik" for unknown reasons. This is a reference to his name always being Eggman in Japan.

As I've said before, I typically consider Eggman to mentally be a small child despite his 300 I.Q. He builds toys (Motobugs, Coconuts, Grounders, etc.). He builds things in his image. He throws temper tantrums when he doesn't get his way. The exception to this is Sonic Adventure 2, which completely violates his character. He wanted to own the Earth, not destroy it. If it's gone, he'll have nothing left to rule over. I'm getting a bit sidetracked. I might make Eggman a more serious threat in this story, just so Sonic can be the underdog that everyone wants to root for.

Amy Rose
When I was around fourteen, I was a bit of a Sonamy fan. I even saw that video where that magazine claimed Sonic was just shy. It does exist, or at least it did... Nowadays I kind of enjoy writing alternate universe stories (even if I don't always finish them) where Sonic hooks up with Amy, just for variety. It won't be a big part of the story, just a simple joke or reference every now and then. I don't know if I'll go through with this or not, but as for the games... If you were to ask me if Sonic has a crush on Amy, I'll simply reply, "I don't know. That's none of my business."

Amy Rose as a character will probably be portrayed as--Oh, how do I put this? She represents that females can fight too as opposed to being a damsel in distress. I kind of feel female protagonists should be a thing young children of any gender should be able to enjoy without ridicule. I'm a male, and I think women should be allowed to save the day in fiction without a moral on gender equality. It shouldn't have to be directly stated that gender doesn't matter, especially when the girls seemed to do better than the boys. I'd like to do it more subtly than that. I'm not sure how to handle Amy getting kidnapped in the Sonic CD adaptation, but I guess I'll cross that bridge when I get to it.

Miscellaneous
I've considered the idea of making Sonic older in this story, perhaps 18 years of age. I'm not sure why; it's just one of those things you get in your head. I've heard someone who worked on Sonic & The Black Knight always wanted to see Sonic with a sword for almost no reason other than it looked cool.

The Sonic Adventure adaptation will be pretty different from the actual game's story. It'll be a pretty linear story without Knuckles or Amy going their separate way from the team. I just don't want to have a huge number of plots going on for a non-parody adaptation of Sonic Adventure.

Sonic's acceleration is also something I want to address in the story. In the games, he never breaks the speed of sound, but in this story he can... The only problem is there's never a straight stretch of land for him to run long enough to get going that fast.

Please let me know what you guys think below. I would love to hear your thoughts, but I really hope I didn't make a complete fool out of myself with this post. 