User blog comment:Famotill/Jiyuu Na Oukoku/@comment-1775303-20100504032237

Since you asked me to look into this, I might as well comment. Looks pretty solid at first glance. Reminds me of a cross between Fairy Tail and Shaman King that is set in the distant future. I have to say, Kiko-kun reminds me a lot of myself! I enjoy seeing distrust and fear in main characters, because it gives them plenty of room to grow and leave new impressions. Thing is, I'd like to see an in-depth detail of the beasts. Are they simply called beasts? Do they have a mysterious backstory? Are they connected to their masters emotionally? Can one beast break away from their master? In this, you're making the beasts sound like advanced Pokemon. No pressure though.

Though I really don't see this anywhere in the article, let me stress this: Do not overpower you character. It could be accidental, but not only does it limit the character's emotional growth, it does not give you the chance to expand the story further. I've seen this with a lot of mangas, most notably Dragon Ball and One Piece. The problem with uber strong characters is that it forces you to create even stronger enemies, to the point they become Mary-sues and Gary-stues.