User blog comment:JakeMcleod/Sonic.Experiment Plans Episode 0 - Pilot(PLEASE REVIEW)/@comment-3002957-20150101083555/@comment-3002957-20150101085132

Ah, so basically what I liked in your writing or what I didn't like? Hmm, alright, that sounds fair enough.

So far your writing is solid, and your canon characters are up to par with how they usually act in their roles. My only thing is that you don't need to bold your letters and all that for your story. It is sort of distracting. So that minor thing is my only real downgrade. Just keep it unbolded and maybe just bold your title and leave the rest unbolded like so:

EX:

Chapter 1: (Title here)

(Text here)

So yeah, good luck with your writing. Once I see more of your writing I will be able to put more of my two cents in. Hope this helped!