User blog comment:Awkwarddingo/An Awkward Dingo Reviews Stuff!/@comment-3027456-20150816214035/@comment-11848168-20150818232700

Time for my review of Astrid the Fox. May I say, before I begin, that this was a very well organized page. Nicely done

History: Loving the sub headings here. Nice story to boot, though I must admit I heard it a few times before. A character suffers a tragic loss and finds her talent soon after. The story about the clan is a bit iffy though. The way she agrees to a hooded guy to join is odd. I guess you could argue that she was desperate... Anyways, I see no transition from loving the clan to killing everyone within it. She just found the truth, but we as readers don't know what the truth is. We can safely assume, but I would love to hear more about them in a story or something along those lines. What also bugs me is her willingness to kill. She goes from shooting targets to killing sprees in mere sentences. We're getting the "Point A to B" With your stories, but we don't get much of a glimpse of the line in between, if you get the symbolism.

Appearance: From what you've written, she sounds pretty cool, and I can manage to paint an image in my head. A female Red Hood, is what comes to mind. Nicely done overall.

Personality: Very basic, overall, but if you do your research right, I can see a possible, and quite believable character suffering from bipolar disorder. I have a friend with that. She's awesome, but I'm derailing here. You should put something about her personality transition before and after the day of grief, to flesh out the character more.

Skills: This heading is nicely done. Her approach to combat sounds /relatively/ realistic. And I see some Batman there too, of course, but with more arrow in knee stuff.

Good work overall, and I know you put the story of Astrid on other pages, like her turning into an assassin. You should put a more thorough summary of that on her page, so people who RP with her and didn't read the stories know a bit more.