User blog comment:Detective SkullWolf/Character Critique Requests/@comment-7200037-20140228052100/@comment-27765057-20140308163729

Let's take this cat out of the bag (haha referencing a dead roleplay) and take a look at what we have here.

Appearance - Her clothes are fine, and the small selection of colors work well here. However, I never liked the concept of a character's eye colors to be the same as either their fur/hair or their main outfit. I think you should switch her eye color out to contrast (perhaps blue). Also, her tail is too large to be a cat's tail, in my opinion. Cat tails are much more skinny.

History: (Alright, I know that English isn't your main language, but you need to fix up the word placement and sentence structure of your writing). I would like to know about Stargala (maybe make a page for that planet. Also, how does this planet teleport?) and also what is this Rockumlus (maybe make a page for that too). It doesn't talk about Zircon that much and we are left with little information about her. You should talk more about her birth, her childhood, growing up, and then throw the events that lead her to Mobius in the mix. Also, you could talk about her adapting to her new life on Mobius (right now it just says that she is on Mobius, nothing else).

Personality: It's short...in fact it's too short. You need to expand on this section more. That's all I can say here because there isn't enough for me to cover.

Powers: Seems to be unique enough, but I think you should go into more detail with what these Strato Stars are capable of.

Conclusion: Your history probably needs to be worked on the most.