Talk:Hikaru the Kitsune: A Future Hope/Chapter Four/@comment-28110995-20161220001627

Okay, just a little critisism here; it's up to you to accept it or reject it. It have been reading your entire series so far and have found here in this chapter that Hikaru talked about the legend to King Sonic. However, I feel that it was just a transfer of conversation that took place in the interlude. If you could, by chance, tell the entire legend with at least adequate detail, then that would be good for me.

But, just saying, "'The Lunar Phoenix. It's a creature of legend. Let's just say, very few know of it.' said Hikaru. She then explained the rest of the legend, including the mention of a tyrant," is not enough. "The rest of the legend" is not enough.