Talk:Raven the Cyberhog(Ultimatum)/@comment-7186862-20160227223539

Okay, here's my critique of him.

Part One: Appearance

Hm, he looks like a pretty good character to me here. His explaination for how he got that way is really solid.

Part Two: Personality

How did he get his Darkspine form in the first place, and why would that take away every negative feeling except his aggression? And is it still there?

Part Three: History

History is pretty detailed, but the tense makes it hard to follow. I saw you had mainly Archie influences, which I don't mind much. Is there any way you could cut it down a little more? I just think it's a tad long still.

Part Four: Skills and Powers

Radiokinesis is a power I've never heard of, but it is really interesting. All I can complain about is the superspeed. Reens is fast too, but her speed is nothing compared to Sonic's. I mean, why call him the fastest thing alive if he isn't? Plus, the Wilderbeest thing. What is it?

Part Five: Weaknesses

Pretty self-explanatory.

Part Six: Relationships

I'm glad he has friends, but at least give him a rival. Enemies are fine too. The family part is blank, so if you don't need it, remove it.

All in all, this character is pretty good. Just rework the history part a bit, give him some rivals, tone down on the superspeed, and... pretty much it. Any questions contact on my wall!