User blog:Kakariko Fried Cucco/Random Fan-Fic

I just worte a random fan fiction, thought it was good, then posted it here. I would like to some contructive critism if you will. Enjoy.

The hedgehog laid there, exhausted from the previous battle, his clothes in tatters, and his white shirt stained with his blood. He heard foot-steps, coming from a direction that he couldn’t make out. Then he heard the foot-steps get closer. When he hear the foot-steps stop, he opened his eyes, his orange eyes, were showing fear for the first time in their lives, as he realised that he was staring death in the face, whose eyes were black, cold, dead, plain and showing no emotion. The pure black hedgehog, picked up the exhausted hedgehog by his bloodied collar, and stared him in the face, being delighted in the fear in his old opponents eyes, and revelling in it. The exhausted hedgehog, closed his eyes, and waited for the end…..

So what did you think? And don't be a troll about it.....