User blog comment:Detective SkullWolf/Character Critique Requests/@comment-26010562-20140228034623/@comment-27765057-20140305045845

Time to review the bunny.

Appearance - I was originally going to complain that her ears are nearly as large as she is, but then I looked up a picture of an actual lopunny and the sizing is pretty close, so nevermind on that. The only suggestion I would make is possibly changing her eye color to contrast from the portion of her ears that are close to the same color and her shirt.

History - I think the fact that she's a Pokemon actually works well with this story. As Pokemon seem to be prone to fighting, it makes sense that she has that tendency as well. My suggestion is to maybe talk more about her "foster mother" or how she got into the foster home (maybe what happened to her original parents). Also, it doesn't really touch on her becoming a magical girl (though I'm assuming that is what the "One Wish" section is for and you're working on that).

Personality - Well, her personality seems pretty fleshed out. I can't really think of any suggestions for this section, which means you did a pretty good job writing it.

Powers - Too be honest, I'm really questionable about her magical girl powers. It just feels...out of place. I would suggest getting rid of them, but that's completely up to you. Other than that, her powers are fine and work well for her.

Conclusion - She's a pretty well written character. There is nothing truly negative to say about her. All that there is to do really is to expand on her history.