Talk:Sonic and the Black Emerald

Certainly one of the best fanfics i've seen...
Spaced nicely, seperating quotes said from different character by paragraphing. However the praise ends there. It's too talkative, and far too descriptionless; I can't get a feel for the characters or their surroundings, so there's too much room for imagination to the point of being unknown if the area is small or big, clustered with items or equipment, such and such. Also, everyone pretty much "said" everything, as though they were showing no emotion in their speaches. Like Emo's pretty much. Use other words such as Yelled, Screamed, Exclaimed, Questioned etc. Each chapter just feels like reading through a transcript of a manga; it doesn't feel like reading a book, novel or any other dense piece of literature.

Biggest problem? Incorporating carbon-copies of things from other franchises. I.e. Pokemon. Unless it's specifically a crossover, it's the lamest thing you can do. Ever. Regardless of reasoning. Still, i won't dwell on the bad things; To clarify the good points, it's written so much better than every other "fanfic" on this wiki; it's not in script format, it doesn't have any "I'm bored." , "I'm bored too.", "Yeah me too.", "Wanna go do something fun?", "No i'm too bored." and any other useless timewasting paraphrases. And, for the love of Christ, this fanfic fic has no bad internet jokes I.e. rickrolling, over 9000 etc.

You're probably thinking "I'd like to see this guy do better." and, to be fair, i can, and have done; It's just not Sonic related and thus has no place on this Wiki. --Guyviroth 22:10, 22 July 2009 (UTC)