Talk:Mackenzie the Tiger/@comment-32712012-20181021003943

Hi Max! I just finished reading the "A Harsh Punishment" section, and it's interesting to see how this chapter of Max's story turns out.

It occurred to me that it make the story more interesting if you turned "A Harsh Punishment" from its step-by-step narration into a fully-fledged fanfiction, which would then let you use all the details that you've already figured out, maybe add a bit more excitement or the like, and also have to save the trouble of writing out all the events beat-by-beat on each character's page. If you're interested and need any help, I'd be happy to help with this.

Also, one last thing: If this isn't a major spoiler, how does Luna die in this yet still appear in Depths of Dimensions? (If this is a major spoiler, you don't have to tell me; I don't want you to have to break that suspense if it's an intentional thing.)

Anyway, good work overall on this new addition! I'll be interested to see what you do in the future with all this.