Talk:Tundra the Husky/@comment-28035054-20160326184955

Okay, so I came here from the critique blog, so I'ma leave this here.

Well… Whenever I critique anything I normally get bashed for it. So I tend to stay away from stuff like this. But… oh well, I'm game.

Her appearance is fine, fairly descriptive, though some things could be added for her physical appearance (Tail, muzzle, if she has any claws on her hands and feet). Attire looks good, nothing really to nitpick or add.

For personality, it describes that she can be polite and annoyed, but doesn't say much in the way of HOW she can be; when she's polite, does she wave in greeting or bow? Does she say "Hello" and "How are you?" or does she just use a more casual "Hi" and "You okay?" choice of words; when she's irked, does her vocabulary change when she raises her voice or does it remain polite? What kind of things annoy her? Also, I probably wouldn't use the term "pissed off". Aggravated or irate would be better words, in my opinion.

Her powers stem from manipulating ice, but you should include a limit as to her cryokinesis, if any; what is the most she can make with one application of her power? How often can she use her powers before she becomes fatigued? Is she experienced or inexperienced?

Only problem I have with abilities is this: "She is unable to see reds (ironically enough, she often wears red)." The only reason why I find this a problem is because nothing in her attire says she wears red predominantly. In fact, the only red thing in her attire is the hair band. So, I'd probably cut that part of the abilities section, or add something in her attire that shows she wears red a lot of the time.

Aaaaand that's about it for me.