Talk:Risaryn

Le Critique
Kinda surprised to see this not as fleshed out like your other pages, especially with no picture, but that's hardly grounds for criticism.

Liking the physical appearance description; short and sweet. However, there are a few problems -- what colour is she? It's cool that we know she has green eyes, but what about her body? The mane on the back of her neck? Also, what's her general shape? An eastern dragon? Oriental? Some kind of mix? I think the description needs to address these points, or alternatively provide a picture of sorts.

History is pretty simple, too, although that's not necessarily a bad thing -- just feels a bit bare-bones. I would suspect that she's understand them being pretty miffed after she raided their food supplies, too.

Again, we have no mention elsewhere as to why she knows Geomancy and Solarmancy, but we get plenty of info about her manipulating crystals. I think this needs to be addressed.

Personality is a bit... It's awkward. Like, if she did nothing wrong, then I would totally expect her to be how she is, but she did keep raiding their food stores. So she's being a bit of a troll in some respect.

Overall, a pretty well thought-out character, but it's got those snagging problems in her personality. Would like to roleplay with her, though, in all honesty. 6/10. --Godrend88 (talk) 00:21, March 18, 2014 (UTC)