User blog:Flyinpenguin117/Sonic Guardians (Destiny crossover), want some prereaders

I'm a fan of the game Destiny. I started to get into Sonic around the time it came out, and crossovers are one of my guilty pleasures. When watching a Livestream of the Vault of Glass, I sort of had the idea to put Sonic characters in that situation. It started sort of as a joke story (one of many things I write but never publish), but I eventually planned to adapt it into a full-length, 10-part story based on Sonic X. I wrote out a full plot synopsis and managed to put together the first chapter (~2500 words), and I wanted some prereaders before I publish it. Heres the link:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/17vpDK9HUs94FEG3KWCponCGnABSHoqluTd6Pt6Rdfh4/edit?usp=sharing

Should be open to anyone who can click the link. Its story is primarily emphasised on Destiny, so I try to explain most of the relevant lore in-story (plus some conjecture, since Destiny is very vague). Chapter 2 is in the works, which will give a little more backstory to the Vex and Guardians for non-Destiny players (if absolutely noone has any idea what's going on, I'll hold out on publishing until I get that done). Anyways, I just need some honest feedback. I've never felt confident enough in anything to put before the public before, so any comments are appreciated. If I did something right or horribly wrong, let me know.