Talk:The Curse of Day/Part4/@comment-32712012-20180127034857

By the way, Max, you might want to change the line where Kennedy says "Making him suffer is freezing him". The reason why is that this phrasing makes it look like the fact that Kennedy is making Mac suffer is what is causing Mac to freeze, rather than the other way around. I'm not quite sure what you did mean to say, but it might be helpful for you to rephrase that line if you didn't actually mean that Mac is only freezing because he's suffering.