Thread:Wikikinetic/@comment-27032473-20190203043959/@comment-32712012-20190203044935

That's an OK backstory, and it mostly makes plot sense, but I wouldn't say that it makes Ominous relatable per se. I also have three questions about the ending of the story, which confused me: I also have a suggestion for how to resolve these problems: Instead of having the whole thing where he tries to use the object, fails, uses it to destroy everything, gets corrupted, and gets sealed away, perhaps you should do this: Have it that, after Ominous becomes bitter and nihilistic due to losing everything, realizing how "evil" he was, and through that, realizing how "evil" everyone else was (which all happens in your story), he tries to use some object to destroy everything in existence, and the gods stop him by locking him in the Mystic Ruins. How does that sound?
 * 1) If Ominous thought that he was evil, and that everyone else was as evil as he was, wouldn't he go directly to the "destroy everyone" state instead of passing through some "destroy all evil" state (whatever "evil" would even mean to him by this point)?
 * 2) Why does Ominous have to get corrupted into a "bitter and nihilistic being" when he already becomes bitter and nihilistic on his own?
 * 3) If Ominous has destroyed everything in existence, 1) how is he still around, 2) how are the gods still around, and 3) how are the Mystic Ruins still around? (Never mind that the gods prevented the world's destruction; they'd need to still be around to prevent something.)

Let me know if you have any feedback on my feedback.