Talk:Scott the Wildcat

Flare's Review
Firstly, can I say well done on the visual description? I could see the character in my mind's eye, although there was a flaw in the description, the positioning of three claymore sheaths across his back. Claymores are big - I've handled a wooden one before, and the sword is well over a meter in length, not to mention bulky. You might have to specify HOW the sheaths are arrayed on his back: typically, a man armed with a claymore would carry a single one in a vertical alignment down the center of his back. While three claymore held could be possible - one over each shoulder and the third down the middle, you might have to consider extrapolating, or possibly even a "star-frame" layout - the standard center sword, with the other two weapons arrayed to fit into a cross pattern above it, creating the impression of an asterisk when viewed directly from behind, with two of the three hilts arrayed over the shoulders, attached to the belt across his shoulders - you would have to add a second for the extra stability, though. It's a rather anime look, but it was the only feasible way I could visualize three claymore sheaths across his back.

Anywho, onwards we go. His personality seems straight-forward, but considering his age, it might make sense to weigh more on his experiences - to view it one way, he's lived through era after era of warfare. My read implied not that he was tired of combat, but that he wanted greater challenges to face honorably, not massacres like the ones he caused avenging his family. Which, in turn, leads me to the next point. His backstory is a touch cliche. "Honorable warrior returns to find his family murdered and seeks revenge. He joins others, and becomes part of an army with a power that resembles immortality." It's a little tropey, for my tastes, but I know that I'm guilty of it myself, so I'm not judging on that. Anywho, he's honorable, so massacres wouldn't appeal to him, so put a little emphasis on that - either guilt at taking so many lives in rage, rather than with honor, or pleasure at avenging his family, despite the brutal means. It's about the only critique I can come up with, because it doesn't fit the idea of a honorable warrior that seeks to face his opponents with a weapon in hand - what's honorable about killing as many as he can at once?

Anywho, my issue with the backstory was covered. You might have to check your wording a little bit more, since the final paragraph was a little bit disjointed and confusing. The first few times I read it, I couldn't figure out why he joined G.U.N, until I took a closer look.

Weapon descriptions were nice. I like the idea of the sword infused with enough blood to take on a vampiric quality, although the big red inlaid gem made me roll my eyes and think of Thundercats, so that's a little bit overdone. No issues with it, mind you, but it's just a little bit meh. The abilities, again, nicely done. The rage is a traditional berserker mechanic, so perhaps that could be mentioned elsewhere in the article - he is a berserker, and gains in power as he sustains wounds, that sort of thing. I do find the idea of using multiple claymore at once a bit far-fetched, since each individual blade is quite large. On top of that, three claymore at once? The only way I'd believe that is if he was a telekinetic. One-handed sword, fine. Hand-and-a-half, possible. Two-handed weapons? Each at least three quarters the wielder's size? No way possible. It's not a One Piece santoryu-type fighting style, with a third blade clenched in the mouth, or the Killer B style from Naruto, with blades in places that swords shouldn't be held. No, if he's capable of spinning the giant blade at a speed greater than most other wielders, I'd probably say that he'd be in the realm of potentially using two at once, depending on how balanced the blades are since he'd have to counteract the increased weight and length of the blades, but never three.

All in all, a good character, Monk, but one that could still use a bit of refining to get his design even better. Sir Flare,   Knight of  The Flaming Sword  07:15, March 1, 2014 (UTC)