Board Thread:Article Critique/@comment-4232858-20140914234715/@comment-7637833-20140915000618

Intro
First off, I have to say, that is one excellent quote. Kinda gives me the idea that Capon's been abused and is now taking a stand against his creator(s).

History
I must say, this is a very good story. I like how he used to be just a normal structure at first, before being remade into the robot he's known as today.

The part about being outdated and getting thrown away is a bit of a tearjerker, imo. Slowly shutting down with no way to get better is kind of a Fate Worse Than Death, get me?

So he built a new town using his own energy, huh? Pretty cool. I like how he's making his own mark in history by making more of himself, eventually creating another Scrap Town. Very good.

Appearance
Ooh, a nonfunctioning eye (?). Reminds me of Scrap Iron's faulty optic.

So he's made of multiple parts? Huh, interesting. Reminds me of the vessel that Yomiel used as a ghost to talk to people in a sunken submarine in Ghost Trick: Phantom Detective.

Abilities
He can revive machines using stored electricity and preserve their memories? Wow. I must say, that is nice. He can make his own friends, I think.

Getting new parts... that also reminds me of Scrap Iron, who picks up weapon systems with his wire tentacles and applies them to his armor when he finds them.

High pressure emotion equals overheating, cool. Fragile body from old parts, logical.

Personality
So he's basically The Smart Bot? I see.

Frustrated by people throwing away tech. That's interesting. I imagine he wants to preserve any kind of technology he finds.

Coexisting with others... heh, I'm getting vibes of the Machines from The Matrix, as they were exiled once.

Conclusion
Overall, I have to say this is a very nice character. I can understand his plight, and I like how he made a town of his kind to live peacefully. His powers and appearance are good too.

However, one bit I'm a little iffy on. In the history section, you use "would" a lot. It implies he hasn't done it yet. I might seem like I'm nitpicking, but I'm just saying that it stands out a little. Rewrite it or something? I dunno.

Verdict: 9/10