Talk:A Different Kind of Normal/@comment-32712012-20180510022441/@comment-32712012-20180510075656

OK, thanks!

I know that there was more than this, but I can only remember two bits of constructive criticism offhand: Remember that both of these are just suggestions and you by no means have to take them; I just thought that I should mention them in case 1) you actually wanted to implement either or both of them or 2) they might be helpful to shaping future projects. Also note that I may provide more constructive criticism on a later date if I remember or come up with it.
 * 1) In Chapter 22, I thought that the scene where Natalie talks to Sasha about Natalie's bisexuality was kind of awkward and unnecessary, since the reader already knows the gist of it and Natalie talks about the very same thing to Angel in Chapter 23. While there could have been some point to the scene, all that I saw that was gained from it was that Sasha is more clueless about her daughter's life than we were supposed to assume, which I don't think really helps much, so I would suggest removing it.
 * 2) At the very end of Chapter 23, when Natalie has that whole internal monologue, I thought that it might be better if she said that to Angel instead of just thinking it, as that makes Angel's story arc seem a little bit more complete and amplifies the "You're a mirror of who I used to be, but I grew past that" effect.

Well, that's about it for now. Thanks for letting me post this!