Board Thread:Article Critique/@comment-26535373-20150602003933/@comment-4232858-20150602024105

(deep breath) Well, here we go. His skill level and powers are quite unbalanced (really, another fast hedgehog, who's even fast enough to dodge bullets, come on) as well as his forms, and then the backstory... well, his backstory has a few questionable bits in them (why give his parents and sister names when you only mention them once? Also, if that's the Jack that I think it is, you REALLY might want to remove that bit, just a bit of advice, especially how they team up to fight a Ben 10 villain, and the writing in some parts seems to be as if someone is directly narrating it to you). Overall the page is... slightly below average, as the flaws I mentioned are easily fixable without changing much of the final product.