Board Thread:Article Critique/@comment-1942179-20141029001523/@comment-32220816-20171125063143

Kay Then!

Overview: I must say that while most other this sums up Smash's overview, some of this could be put in Fun Facts or something like that than in this section. However, I must give props to you for analyzing and summing up such a three-dimensional character.

Looks: Personally, I'd prefer it it were a bit more descriptive about his other costumes, but whatever. Though I'd probably have a different picture of Smash in my mind without the sprite, it's close enough to his actual appearance.

Personality: Nice job with this one, Smash - you aced this! It literally descrimes everything about Smash, and I've even read RPs like Down Under, Natural Enemies and Odyssey to back up these claims - so far, I've seen no contradictions. (Off-topic, but I'm in love with his character.)

Strengths & Powers: Nice and accurate description of what he can and can't do. I like how though you gave him no powers, he can still get the edge in fights with his battle prowess. If balances him as a character, and sprinkling High Tension on top gives him a big addition to his hype factor. Once again, I've been scanning the wiki for Smash fights - again, no contradictions. (Another thing that's unique is how he can't truly fly in his super form.)

General Info: Where the others cover Smash's skills and his personal, this one explains his background. You make Smash a relatable character with it - while you mention his parents' death as a plot point, you don't use it as a sob story, which sends me green flags. (Something I find cool is how he criticizes those who do use traumatic backstories as a crutch in Roleplays, signaling he has moved beyond his parents' death.) You inform me of his daily life you still need to change that part about the Blitz Pit points, though and let me see him as a real person. I like how you build a bit of hype towards SpTH, and how you describe his arsenal. Nice job!

Backstory: I feel like this isn't necessary because of GI. I think you could've smuggled it into General Info quite easily, and that it's undeserving of its own section. I'd rather have something like History than Backstory  (though History would take forever).

Author's Notes: D'aw, chili Smash is cute Seriously, though, this is Smash's true Backstory. This tells how far he's come, and you show how he went from a recolor to one of the most developed characters on this wiki. Makes a kid she'd a tear...

Appearances: Roleplays... could be updated, but other than that, if seems like it's on point with Smash as of now. That's all there really is to say.

Relationships: Though some of these are super close (him and Pearl) and some of these feel kinda ignored (him and Diamond), with so many characters, it's hard to blame you. Even though some are short, you get the job done with the descriptions.

Fun Facts: Just what it needs to be. Quick and short statements about Smash that provide even more insight into Smash's life. It manages to cover many things that woulcers be considered interesting to someone. Also, pizza is beast

All jn all, Smash is a great and relatable character who regains his humanity, and acts with sanity even when he's confronted with the most outrageous of people. His page is great with minor flaws, and it does an above-adequate job of representing the echidna.