Talk:Depths of Dimensions/Part 2J (SO)/@comment-32712012-20180429214609

So, does anyone have any suggestions about my giant top-level comment below (or, more specifically, the lede, bullet point 1, and bullet point 2)? I'd just re-iterate it here, but it's about a page long, so I'd just like to ask if people (or at least the people in this part of the roleplay: Reens and Julia) could tell me what they think of these parts of the below comment so that we can then move along the roleplay (which would be nice).