Talk:Ashton Origans

Critiques? You bet your green ass!
Ah, this takes me back; to the days where all you needed for an OC were different colors, one or two new powers, and a different name. Nowadays, it's rare to find a Hedgehog this bland, and I sincerely believed we were past this. As a result, this page is making me scream in uncontrollable fury.

Well, let's get right down to it, shall we? Otherwise I'm just wasting precious letters and we don't need two users doing that now, do we?

So, let's start with description. Where I'll start by pointing you that you admit he looks "similar" to our Blue Blur, but with different clothes and green, rather than blue. That's fine; I tend to think most Hedgehogs on here look pretty much identical anyway. I guess it's a racist thing or something. I don't like how you contradict yourself by adding the useless, fingerless gloves. It's unnecessary and it looks like you slapped that there just for 'teh cool factorz'.

His personality is blah, nothing much to it; you pretty much expect these OC's to be carefree, heroic Sonic clones. I like how you add swords and bow and arrows, making him at least a bit different from what I usually see here. Still, it's not enough to redeem the copy-and-pasted personality.

Next we have - oh boy - the powers. Now, what we have here is the standard-issue "Chaos Pack" powers list; instead of putting time and effort into creating a power that hasn't been used before or finding some skill set that would make your character more interesting, you've just decided to slap Sonic, Silver, Shadow, and Blaze together to make a lazy-ass powerset. Congratulations! You get extra hatred for not even attempting to explain where his Chaos powers come from; this earns contempt from even the most reasonable critic.

Not even gonna bother with the weaknesses because they're just an extension of your cookie-cutter personality above.

Off to the side I noticed two things; 'multihog' and a hatred for 'internet hackers'. What the hell is a multihog, and when did it get it's Facebook account cracked?

Overall? This character isn't as terrible as some I've seen, but I'm not holding any high hopes for it's future. If you want to be serious about creating OC on here, I suggest doing a major overhaul to his personality and skillset; give him genuine reasons for why he does what he does, and give him something concrete to go with in terms of personality. Characters react differently to different situations; how does Ashton react to a pizza in his face? How about a gun?

As I've said; the power list is just godawful and should be thrown into the trash in favor of something more original. You have a Sword and Bow and arrows; go with it, create a power set around that.

I'd give this guy a 2/10 if only for the fact that you managed to at least have the decency to not use that stupid "create a character" game for the article's image. --火星 'Wages'War 19:06, October 4, 2013 (UTC)