Talk:Raven the Cyberhog/Archive 3

Hi there. You have requested me to review your character, Nitro. Well I will give you my full 6 step review on him.

Stage One- Design: A hedgehog/cyborg hybrid is very original and unique I'd have to say. His classic design doesn't really stand out to me that much, nor does the dreamcast design. However, the modern design I actually really like. The shoes are somewhat unique too.

Stage Two- Character: A friendly person. He's also secretive about cyberspace? Hmmm.... there's no picture of his cop clothing,"Arondight the Sneak" or whatever his name is. But he has an odd character. Friendly and sweet and then turns into a beast. Wow.

Stage Three- Powers: Oh my...... this lists almost ' EVERY SINGLE KINETIC THERE IS!!!! ' That isn't good. If he masters all kinetics, just put down "multikinetic". He has a bunch of transformations too. Harnessing Powercore energy. Typical. But lifting up to 20 tractors. This is kind of odd, and almost to the point of being a complete marty-stu. People will think this is a joke character because of this.

Stage Four- History: An evil stepfather, who killed his own mother Now that sounds very heartbreaking. His father is more of a jack@$$ than a villain, blaming them for doing things they never even did. After their funeral, they were seperated..... saaad. And this is where the bad stuff comes in. He's getting involved in canon games. That must go bye-bye. Now there is "alternate histories" but what was the one tiny thing that changed everything? And now, Raven is rich. Another Marty-Stu trait. So Erica Askiname and Lili the Cat have more money, but what the hell?

Stage Five- Durability: Immortal? Hmm.... 10 years of training and you get an immortalizer, how do you even obtain that? As a food? Through surgery? And if his mother is mentioned, he either cries or becomes yet even STRONGER. -_- Is he completely invincible?

Stage Six- Relationships: 5 cousins. Pretty normal. Good job. 3 girlfriends? Trinity the fanbrat, Krys the Miss Mariala, and Andrea the Rabbit. And he's best friends with his female counterparts, when they should be from a different dimension. Pretty good here though.

These are only ideas that I recommend to follow, you don't need to though. Azareth Metrion ZINTHOS!!! 23:51, August 11, 2014 (UTC)

Skimming this page...this character is ridiculously overpowered. Sorry to say, but this is a blatant godmod Mary-Sue. ♥ Come on and fight me, you cowards!   I run from nobody! ♥ 00:31, August 12, 2014 (UTC)