Thread:GalaxyWorld27/@comment-33279589-20180328074546/@comment-32712012-20180328081735

Thanks for asking! Here's my feedback: If you need any more help, I can try to help. (I can't guarantee that I'll be able to help, but I can try.) Also, if you want me to actually implement any of the changes that I suggested above, I'm happy to do that too.
 * Yuki:
 * The Appearance section does its job well.
 * The Personality section is a bit too pushy about how amazing Yuki is. Compressing it somewhat would probably help.
 * The History section doesn't properly explain why Yuki has an army and is slaying people, all at the age of 2. Clearing that up would be useful. Other than that, the section is OK.
 * The Trivia section is perfectly fine.
 * The Gallery section (if you're counting this) has some nice pictures. (This one is my favorite.) I also like the infobox image.
 * Bianca:
 * Her personality is generally more well-rounded than Yuki's, showing us both the strengths and flaws of her character. However, there are some problems with the writing itself. Aside from the whole breast-touching thing that you probably already know about, the page contradicts itself as to whether Bianca treats Azmaria poorly because she treats everyone poorly or whether she treats Azmaria nicely because the two of them have a special bond. Clearing that up would greatly improve the page's quality.
 * Azmaria:
 * The Appearance section does a good job of concisely summarizing it's content. Nice going with this section!
 * The Personality section spends much too long saying how amazing Azmaria is. This is just like Yuki's Personality section's trouble, only this is somewhat worse because it's five paragraphs of redundancy as opposed to Yuki's one. Compressing this drastically would be very helpful to boosting the page's overall quality.
 * The Age section is rather confusing. Aside from the fact that it says that Azmaria is 3, yet she clearly looks like a teenager, it says that Azmaria is 3 and will remain 3 forever, which is not how age works. Clarifying precisely what you mean to be saying here would be useful.
 * The Outfits section has nice artwork, and its fairly minimal text does its job well.
 * The Powers and Abilities section is reasonably good. I can't pinpoint anything that needs to be fixed here.
 * The Relationships section has some virtues and some problems. In terms of virtues, it's generally fairly concise and usually explains its contents clearly. I say "usually" because it occasionally doesn't explain its contents clearly, which is its main problem. As an example of not explaining things properly, it indicates that Azmaria and Bianca have a good relationship, yet every one of Bianca's mentioned actions towards Azmaria is harmful to Azmaria in some way.
 * The Trivia section, like the Powers and Abilities section, is reasonably good, and I can't pinpoint anything that needs to be fixed here.

I hope that this feedback will be helpful!