Thread:K.A.M.I.T.R.O.N CYBERGOD OVER 9000/@comment-30144664-20190317163723/@comment-30144664-20190319010222

Okay, so I haven't thought of any weaknesses, but I have thought of something else that you should probably do, which is work on paragraph structure. Now, one of my personal pet peeves is that a paragraph should never be more than at most ten sentences at a time. The paragraphs you wrote for Omni Sonic we're extremely long, which made it hard for me to read, and no doubt for anyone else who read it.

So, here's an example of what a section of a page usually should look like for structure:

"Lithium at first started out life looking like a robotic Lynx, with no fake fur or anything to cover her metallic parts. However, Loki refused to give up and continued to make more and more realistic looking bodies for Lithium. As for Lithium, she never looked forward to a new body, as Loki would take her old one apart and replace it while her program was still active. She found the process to be extremely painful, but Loki dismissed her complaints. Lithium ceased to speak anything of it, and instead suffered through it all.

Eventually after several years of work, he constructed the body that Lithium currently has.

For the first few years of her life, Lithium had lived in isolation, with only Loki for company. It wasn't until her final body was constructed that she got to see the outside world for the first time. And it wasn't until that day Loki told her the reason for her creation- as method of "resurrecting" his dead sister."

Anyway, I'll talk to you more tomorrow, okay? See ya.