Talk:The Lilac Saga/Pilot Season/@comment-32712012-20180521223808

Speedy, would you mind changing something and considering changing something else? That's all for right now. Otherwise, nice story!
 * Thing that I'd like for you to change: I find that discussion bit about Andy not having something to be kind of disturbing, as I generally prefer to avoid imagining genitalia on Mobians. Would you mind removing it?
 * Thing that you might want to change: I can't tell if you meant for Andy's real name to be Abigail or Abigal (which is what you wrote), but if you meant for Andy's real name to be Abigail, you might want to change all mentions of Abigal to Abigail.