User blog comment:Detective SkullWolf/Character Critique Requests/@comment-25127724-20140228072607/@comment-27765057-20140310205929

Sure, I'll look over your metal. Just tell me which element on the periodic table we're talking here.

So before I look into this character, I'm going to note that you have the heading colors...all over the place. This can be very distracting and I highly advice that you stick with either one color or a specific pattern of colors.

Appearance - Well, he looks amazing. In fact, I dare say that he looks like an anime character. I wouldn't change anything here.

History - I'll be honest, I never liked the idea of G.U.N being an evil militarized organization that performs horribly inhumane experiments on people that just ends up giving them neat powers. I find this to be a very common thing when it comes to a character's power's origins (I admit that a couple of my characters use this concept, but at the very least I use an entirely different organization). It was never really implied in the Canon Universe that G.U.N is evil (Project Shadow was initiated with good intentions). But considering that Metal is an older character, I'll let it slide. I would like some clarity as to why G.U.N needed to create a super soldier (perhaps because they just aren't as effective as Sonic is when it comes to dealing with evil like Eggman). and also why the other subjects died (what kind of experiments were they performing that would have killed them?). The one thing that strikes me as odd is in the last sentence: "He later on, tries to find the truth about himself". Does this mean that he was completely unaware that he was a test subject for the first twelve years of his life? What truth is he searching for?

Personality - So he's pretty cold because of the experiments. Kinda makes me want to learn more about the experiments (all I know is that they give him powers, which doesn't really seem that bad). Another thing to note: He hates mobians and humans (despite technically being both :U). This hate just seems to come out of nowhere without any justified origin (and please do not say "because of the experiments"). Finally, I noticed that a lot of Metal's personality traits are originating from the experiments. I feel that a lot of these traits would change over time (more than just his reason for fighting), making him a more dynamic character.

Items - While I see no problem with him having swords, I think the guns are a bit unnecessary. With all of his powers and swords, why would he need guns (this is why I resent Shadow in his respective game. He never needed guns in his previous appearances)? The only other thing to note is the Omega Blade's origin. I honestly find it hard to believe that Metal just found it in a cave. It would be more believable if there was something special about the cave, like being the former home of a dragon (that Metal may or may not have slain) and the blade being a part of its treasure hoard.

Powers -

Icefire: Is this suppose to be fire and ice as separate powers or a combination of the two? If it's the later, then I'm pretty sure all you would get is water. Just saying...science.

Dragon Soul Absorption: 1. Ancestry? I thought he was artificially created? 2. I think this should increase the effectiveness of his lesser powers (like super strength, enhanced vision, and enhanced vision) due to them being more related to him being part-dragon.

Superhuman Strength: Makes sense because he's part-dragon.

Healing Factor: I don't think you should have both this and enhanced durability. Out of the two, enhanced durability makes more sense because he's part-dragon.

Enhanced Hearing: Makes sense because part-dragon.

Enhanced Vision: Good thing G.U.N didn't make him colorblind (haha Sonic Adventure 2 joke). Also, part-dragon.

Power Replication: I feel that this one should go. At this point Metal has plenty of powers, and this one doesn't really fit with the others.

Conclusion: Turtles. I give this an angry buffalo out of ten.