Thread:Smash The Echidna/@comment-29013084-20160712161540/@comment-1942179-20160713013924

Didn't notice this till just now. Surprised you came to me, stranger.

Well I gotta say, there really isn't much TOO critique. This doesn't even meet Policy Standards, to be honest. All I've got are his powers and the fact that he is king of the world (unless Mobius is a country or something in your canon?)

He's got too many powers. Fire, Ice, and Lightning are more than enough. Super reflexes to top it off makes it iffy. But he definitely does not need time controlling powers on top of it all, in my opinion. That just makes him borderline overpowered. Powers don't make the man.

His weaknesses seem fine, although the one about his stamina could use rewording. Basically, he has low physical stamina, but high magical/spiritual/mental power. The line "do you get it or no? No? Read it again then." is completely unnecessary and shouldn't be on the page. It only makes the reader feel as if they're being talked down to, with the writer assuming that they're idiots.

The main problem with this page is that it lacks content. All pages should have a minimum of two paragraphs. Instead we have a few lists with no more than a single sentence to describe them (save for like, one line.) This character has no personality, no history, backstory, current story, likes or dislikes, friends or enemies, nada. We barely even know what he looks like; the most we know is what color he is and what he wears. Save for that, the page only talks about his powers. There really isn't much to go on here. You need to put a LOT more work into this guy.