User blog comment:Awkwarddingo/Awkward Reviews by a Dingo/@comment-5213105-20140318010409/@comment-11848168-20140324024311

Sorry for the wait. When I made the scheduled I didn't put how much time I chat into account....so without further delay!

General info will be split by its sub headers, which you graciously made. Let me add that I love the transitional sentences between paragraphs.

Before into further, I should also review the introductory paragraph. This is a great outline for the story of your character, giving him a small background not large enough for tl;dr people. The story seems a lot like Transformers though. Refugee aliens taking the form of common things or people... This was probably unintentional but it is still noteworthy.

I'm not sure how much I can say about his location. He has an odd friend, burning down homes and bequeathing multimillion dollar companies. This was a good start, although it could be more chronological.

His status is unusual for an OC. He starts a company and goes to jail, actually losing a lot in the process. This is the first divorce I have seen on the wiki. Him busting out to take care for his kids was an adorable touch.

His sense of right and wrong I have seen before. Saying that doesn't mean it's bad. As long as it is consistent with his personality, it is fine. I liked it.

His economic and political stance reminds me of Forrest Gump. If you are unfamiliar, he bacame incrediblynrich to the point that he never really cared for money anymore. This seems to be Freeze's case.

Im only going to go over his current appearance, since past appearances are in the past. First off, Freeze isn't just tall, he's abnormally tall for a mobian. Sonic's official height is 3'3". I'll just let that sink in. I was surprised, too. His physical appearance is good and the pixel images and drawing helped me understand it more. You say it reminds you more of a porcupine, but hedgehogs have sharp quills as well. Arguably the biggest difference between the tow animal, or the only one people care to notice, is that hedgehogs can roll up into a ball and run across corkscrews, so I still thought about hedgehogs when it came to his fur. Putting the red eyes of his alien race is a nice way to remind readers he is, in fact, an alien. His outfit is bad boy/outlaw/biker. Ripped up or no shirt, nice jacket of leather. His two named outfits are stylish and fit the character really well. By the way, most people tend to stick with one outfit that ends up being revamped once in a while. A change in pace like yours is always welcome.

Ok. I looked at the paragraph for his personality and DAYUM. really in depth.,,and TO BE CONTINUED. You put my love for quantity to shame! All in all, though, his personality is a developing one. It adjusts with age, location, and company. Ranging from lone wolf to curiosity for others. Developing personality is incredible if done right, and you did it right. This guy is a learning being, like most other sentient creatures. His cause for doing things is noble, with his children and ex wife. I can go on for a while on how well detailed and developed this is, but I'm behind schedule, so moving on!

Dude, if I were to have one complaint, it would be your lack of finding a good sentence that finishes off a section of info, pressing enter after said sentence, and pressing tab. Paragraphs, my boy! Learn em. Love em. This story, though, is quite sad. Not just his running away, but also his inability to find his siblings. Still, an alien breaking out of a lab, that I heard of. Good thing he conveniently found that one girl in the middle of a forest with a secret alien research lab nearby. That is my complaint on his history, its incredibly convenient events. But I guess that escaping and finding help can be done in few ways.

I can't do Mich in relationships (and they aren't in my job description) so I'll go down to abilities...*sighs* so many words.... He has great powers. Being a walking source of gamma radiation, people just tend to MELT in his arms...get it? Melt!... Once again, you go into incredible depth to tell the readers about his extraordinary powers, which I love. Usually, people go overboard with giving their characters martial arts, but you actually named them..,,a lot of them (there are such things as bullets, you know).

Next up are his skills. These are surprisingly short compared to everything else. His skills match up with the rest of him, too. The degree explains how he can take over a company. His leadership skills explain how he kept the company. His wordplay, though, does not have a lot of proof, but if he got a wife, he must be good.

Weaknesses do what weaknesses should do, balance his powers...and more. His weakness to the bottle makes a nice addition to the number of things that I have yet to see, until now, at all on the wiki. His friends being used as a weapons, though, I have seen way too many times. Though most would disagree. His power oriented weaknesses may end up killing him. Too few times have characters been given awesome powers but at a huge cost. I can hardly believe he is alive with all that radiation in his system, alien or not. This leaves his powers to have to work in conjunction with his martail arts. His martial arts weakness is pretty big, too. Kicks, in my experience in martial arts, are slow and predictable, and should be a follow up to weaker attacks. Freeze, though, seems capable enough to make kicks alone useful, but at the practical cost of speed and imbalance if preformed wrong or blocked.

Final verdict: This character page is awesome. My biggest complaints are the all too convienient occurrences after his escape from the lab and the length of individual paragraphs. Find a way to space info out.

You get a ten points, which I will put into your bank account so you can start investing- aaaaaaaaand it's gone.