Thread:Wikikinetic/@comment-32220816-20171125021021/@comment-32712012-20171129150635

OK, I've finally done the critique (or at least part of it), and here's what I have to say for now: That's about it for the moment. I'll write more if I think of more to write.
 * Luna is definitely villainous enough to be considered a villain. I actually find her kind of creepy.
 * The section arrangement is useful (except for the empty section, which I'm sure will be useful once you put something in it).
 * I'm having trouble saying whether she is a "good" character or not, since it's difficult for me to get past how disconcerting I find her. She's definitely at least somewhat interesting, though I can't say precisely how interesting I find her.
 * This isn't about Luna the character, but about something on her page: Your two paragraphs about White made me interested in White's character, so good job making him interesting! (Now I kind of hope that you'll make a page for him...:D )
 * There are a few minor things that I noticed, like the fact that the description of Luna's boots is not in the same place as the description of the rest of her clothing. I could try to go through the article and fix those, if you wanted, or I could check through the article again and list them here.

I hope that this information will be helpful!