User talk:Valkyrei/Ruby the Bloodthorn

Smash's Review ~By request.
Alright so here's my review. To start things off, That's a pretty nice picture you have up there. Though it's a little wide with open space around; It might be better to crop it so that it shows just Ruby. But that's just what I think.

Moving on. Her backstory has a few shades of cliche in it. Was once part of a family of vampires, but was sent away with her memories erased, age reset (that's unusual though), and her powers sealed so that she could start fresh after a war or bloody battle of sorts. You know I've had that type plot forced on me before. That's the whole reason I made this section in my guide to characters and roleplaying. But since this is actually your story, let's not go there. Just one thing though. Juri sacrificed her life to save Ruby. But what about her other sibling(s)? What happened to them?

Later, I see someone named Midnight the Cronos, and think "Wait, wasn't Midnight dead?" Of course, if this is a different character with the same first name, that can't really be helped too much. Then a couple of paragraphs later I see him again, and it's talking about how he's the ancestor of the Purebloods, meaning it is the same guy. If he was revived, you probably should have said so earlier. Also the fact that her older brother kissed her is kinda...gross. Unless it was on the cheek or something, but still.

Leaving the backstory, her personality's about what I expected. Also, blood tablets. To me that feels like a pretty blatant excuse for not having a vampire go around biting people like they usually do. But the note after that does make up for it.

It's interesting that she has an entire section for her weapon. The weapon and skills that come with it are all pretty cool and have my approval. Her powers also seem pretty acceptable.

All in all, she's a pretty good character, but I'm really put off by the brother/sister romance. Other than that, I don't have much to say wrong about her. Good job. ~Smash The Echidna~  02:28, March 11, 2013 (UTC)