Talk:Sonic Rectification/@comment-39521143-20191111205921

I like the concept, but I think you're being a tad too descriptive with the plot summary. Typically when you're summarising the events of a game, it's more of a general description of said events rather then a step by step sort of thing. I also noticed that both in the description at the top of the page and the development section you have incomplete sentences. You might want to finish those.

Another thing... I don't know if you already explained this in the actual script or not- I'll have to read it to be sure- but if you haven't already, you should explain why Sonic and his friends are trying to stop Ominous in the first place. The main reason Sonic and his friends fight Eggman is because he is evil, so to no longer have to fight him would probably be a blessing.

I think the explanation behind Sonic fighting against Ominous in this could be something like this: by taking away the rest of the universe's choice, Ominous could be seen as committing an act of evil, even though he thinks what he's doing is right.

You don't have to explain it that way, it's just an idea, that's all.

Last thing: you might want to change the number "72" to "seventy-two" spelled out. When reading the stuff at the top, I keep finding that "72" glaring at me and it's a little... jarring.