Talk:Book One: The Beginnings

Is very nice.
there's not really a lot that i dislike about your writing style; infact it's pretty much virtually zero; a lot of descriptive text that allows me to identify with the characdters and the surroundings enough to keep me interested, dialogue is good; no bad jokes or horrific text, story seems good as well, a lot of variety in vocal expressions and such. Chapters are pretty lengthy as well so it doesn't look like i'm reading a child's book. All i can say it keep it up --Guyviroth 21:22, 24 July 2009 (UTC)