Board Thread:Article Critique/@comment-27765057-20140914232815/@comment-5732702-20141110222900

There is honestly no excuse for my lateness here.

Okay, so since I think the main thing you've been working on here is her backstory, I'll address that:


 * First, I see one tiny little grammatical error in the first paragraph. "not longer after", that should just be "not long after." Nothing serious but I always have a habit of picking apart grammar mistakes.
 * The way she got her nickname is absolutely adorable and pretty meaningful. Cookie points for you here.
 * I do find it interesting that her biological parents want her back, although it makes a lot of sense taking the beginning of the story into consideration.

In short, not bad at all so far. I'm very interested to see what happens next, and again I am so freaking sorry taking so long with this. qq