User blog comment:Detective SkullWolf/Character Critique Requests/@comment-17933036-20140305035435/@comment-27765057-20140320195852

Appearance – There's only one sentence and it just states that he’s a recolor of Sonic. First of all, Zapor clearly is not just a recolor, as Sonic does not have front hair on his head. You could have described the goggles he wears and his clothing and improved this section greatly.

History (Warning: Rant) – So let’s see where this story begins…Zapor is born, dead parents, Zapor learns to use a gun before he can even walk (I’m  assuming this is the case because it states that his parents were murdered when he was born and he was brought back to the murderers’ house to be taught to use a gun. It does not state that any time has passed between these events so I assume that they happened right after each other), murderers suddenly go to prison, GUN suddenly goes evil  and experiments on Zapor who suddenly has powers, Zapor ends up in grandparent’s house, Zapor gets chao and closet full of guns. Did I mention this all happened during the first four years of his life?

Where do I start? This story went bad the very minute it started. Usually I try to be subtle about my complaints, but this story honestly does not have much going for it. The murderers were just thrown in there to make the story edgy and ended up disappearing from the plot even though they clearly had some significance here. Why do they teach him to use a gun (what could they possibly gain out of that)? Do I need to even mention how it is pretty impossible for a toddler to even fire a gun without toppling over? Who in there right mind gives a 1-4 year old a gun? It does not explain why Zapor gets tested on by GUN, and then why he suddenly ends up with his grandparents. Why does Zapor later get abducted by GUN again? The biggest problem I have with this story is that this all happens in the first four years of his life. I suggest a complete revamp of this story or at the very least stretch out the plot so that this all happens to him at a much older age.

Personality: To be honest, I had expected this character to have gone completely insane after everything that happened to him in the story at his age.

Powers –

Healing Factor: I don’t like this power giving him immortality.

Skills –

Gun Specialist: I find it very, very unbelievable that this 8-year old knows how to “use every type of gun known to man”. Can you even imagine what would happen if an 8-year old tried to fire a shotgun? It would probably be like those midget shotgun enemies from Borderlands. If Zapor was much older than this would make sense.

Sword Specialist: Same as Gun Specialist, except this one is even worse because it never even explained in the history were he learned to use a sword. The “he used a sword to kill an entire army” part sounds mary-sueish, and again unbelievable for an 8-year old. Are you telling me that a legion of highly trained soldiers all get killed by one kid?

Beserker Spin Dash: All I have to say is “Run as fast as Sonic” no, no, NO!

Conclusion: I am afraid that I may have came off as being too negative on this article, but I am being completely honest when I say that the negatives  outweigh the positives on this article. The biggest issue is this character’s age, which makes everything about this character silly and unrealistic. I recommend upping this character’s age and rewriting his story. I want to do another review on this character eventually and see if he has improved. For now, I give this a Sonic Labyrinth out of ten.