User blog:Neoexlucky/My first OC

Did you guys know I used to suck at making OC's? It's true, my first OC was such a Mary-Sue that it could destroy anything by just blinking. Now I changed him and played with his back story and such so now he's better. I just wanted to show the differences between the two. Also since my First OC was for my little pony: Friendship is magic, I'll try to explain it to anyone not familiar with the terms and conditions. Alright, let's go!

Meet Beta Time Spinner! Okay so to any bronies, they're going to notice the wings and horn, which means their and alicorn. Alicorns are majestic beings, that normally are placed as royalty and are the strongest beings in their world. Think of an alicorn like being a long lost twin of a main character like Sonic or knuckles. Worse than that though, it's like they're stronger then all of them combined. This is also where we get into the next part of his mary-sue-ness.

Alicorn beta Time Spinner has the ability to control time, he can speed it up, slow it down, stop it all together, and take time out of anyone's life. He has no issues with this, has mastered it at a young age, and it doesn't drain his powers at all. Yep, OP at it's finest, but we're not done yet.

One of the main characters in the show is a unicorn named Twilight Sparkle. She has the element of magic, so of course she should be one of the greatest magi ever right? Time's better than her at it. He's also in a relationship with Twilight Sparkle, which is something I've grown to dislike over the past year. He's considered powerful, smart, and royal. The only thing is that he isn't strong and he isn't considered good-looking. That was my OC, luckily I had some sense beaten into me by my friend and now we can take a look at Original Recipe Time Spinner, who may still be OP, (I don't think he is anymore but it's still there.) but he's not Mary-Sue.

Okay so let's start with his species, he's just a unicorn. Now in the MLP series their are three main pony species, earth, pegasus, and Unicorn. Earth Ponies are strong, Pegasi are can fly, mess with the weather, and considered fastest, and then their are Unicorns, who are the most intelligent of the three, and can use magic. All of these are considered common, so being one is like being fox in the sonic fannon, it's just normal. He's not royalty, he's not popular, he's just...him!

Time Spinner still has the ability to mess with time but I've given it a limit. So first of all he can only stop time, he can't speed it up, slow it down, destroy it, or anything else. He can only stop it, but it gets better. He can only stop it by himself for 2 seconds and with a magical pocket watch that was recently stolen in his last RP for 12 seconds. The downfall to it is that he can only use basic, advanced, and healing magic with it. He can't use fire, water, etc. This is actually really fun to exploit as their are several moments when Time could have used fire but couldn't. Also when he stops time for, it takes a while to recharge. 24 hours when he stops it for 12 seconds, and 1 hour when he stops it for 2 seconds. That is unless he gets recharged by some other unicorn or an alicorn.

He is still connected to Twilight but in a different way. Twilight in the show became an alicorn so she did so in the RP community too. Time Spinner also became a well known historian and to some of the royals, a good sage and advisor. He's grown to hate Twilight Sparkle and this often leads to fights between them, which is stopped by Princess Celestia, the leader of the four alicorns. He's smart but he's not powerful, or storng, or good-looking, or anything like that. We also exploit his fear of spiders and he also has a fear of dragons. (Yes they exist in the world of MLP too.)

So this was just to show that when you first make a character, it's going to suck, and it will more than likely be OP but it's not something to be ashamed of. Plus if we take a look at Neo he was just a first cut, I'm still going through a list of abilites and soem development for him, so who knows what will happen to him. I think I've gotten better at Character making now.