Board Thread:Article Critique/@comment-3002957-20150430155345/@comment-1635430-20150505220051

For starters this character already comes off as interesting, chimera doesn't seem like a common pick for species, so that's already an eye grabber. His personality seems to make sense yet at the same time it sounds like a bit of a mess, understandably so after reading his history. I understand that he's used to death, but even the greatest of kills bat an eye at the death of a loved one even if it's the smallest of shock and the connection isn't too far along. The effects do seem to set in, in time so that's sorted out. His abilities seem a it over powered at first. After reading more it does balance out. Still concerning, but everything works in phases. Speed and his overconfidence being his weakness, I can't help that that's a bit small for weaknesses, makes me think of some higher up anime villain. Over all though, this character sounds pretty dang cool, even after reading through that wall of text XD