Talk:Percy the Dream Eater

Hi there Nikki. A month and a half ago you commented on my blog saying that you wanted me to review Percy. Alright. I'll keep my word. So here we go!

Stage One- Design: Alright. He has a pretty good design. But, nothing really stands out on him. Maybe you could make the black part of his spikes glow, or the pink part? He doesn't wear any clothes. That's really all I have here....

Stage Two- Character: The main core of his personality is "Mysterious". But, all you write is how he tricks others into paralyzing their dreams. Maybe that could describe him as a trickster. You need to describe your character in depth. Tell us what makes him so mysterious. Is he scary? Which leads my right into....

Stage Three- Powers: Maybe you could give him a form of either a purple spirit, instead of a normal mobian, either that or something that is completely invisible. Maybe you could also give him a power that makes him kill his dreams. You could also give him a certain power that reverses the power of whoever he feels sorry for.

Stage Four- History: Your character has only one heading of information: Victims, and then a subheading: Beatrice the Dog. It only told that she was deceased because she was tricked. But how about a character that declined his request to give them dreams?

Stage Five- Durability: Your character is pretty powerful, but one sign of a dislikable character is if he's invinsible. Is he allergic to anything? What weakens/defeats him. Nobody likes a villain who keeps on winning. It's like when a bunch of grown up men pick on little toddler.

Stage Six- Relationships: He only seems to have enemies.... not even. He doesn't have any friends or enemies. I could get you started of with my precious little rascal. But then, you have to give him enemies. Who does he like? Who does he hate?

Just be mindful, that I'm only giving ideas to help your character. I can't control your character. You run his life, not me. I hope you take some of these ideas. :)  ♪Pianoteen♪ 19:44, April 21, 2014 (UTC)