User blog comment:SapphireFlower64/Character's Backstory/@comment-10290971-20151011214315/@comment-10290971-20151013114514

Although it's a good idea to include how she came to know her companions (like that chao as an example) the other thing you need to be aware of are how many ideas you have floating around in her story as well as whether she is a mary sue or not.

I recall when I first started out here, I didn't really quite get that and because of it my characters were very often mary-sues, which resulted in them not really being believable or likeable, and is one of the reasons I rebooted everything I did, and revamped all of my characters.

You have a lot of ideas in this character, and it's good to have ideas as a writer, but something we all need to know is when it's too much. You have chaos powers, dead parents, near-death experience, amnesia, and royal blood. The problem with all of these is that it can't focus on one, sort of like a Jack-of-all-trades. On top of that, a lot of people get a little flustered when they see a character who is royal, or who has items from a canon character. Granted, this is all up to you, I'm only making suggestions.

Anyway, near death experiences can be a lot of things that would have killed someone. It could have been the same thing that happened to her parents (a failed assassination) it could have been her chaos powers, even something as little as falling down, could be it. I'm sure if you wanted you could google stories of near death experiences and try and learn some of the examples from that.

...Now that was really long...