User blog comment:1st Prince of Winds/Winter Awards 2018: Fusion's votes/@comment-4567194-20180205043506/@comment-27869658-20180206020327

No problem. I still have a thing here. So I'm going to place this down with the time I have a job to do. So here's my extensive no hate saltpost Salt-style: The Continuation Jutsu Now that I'm back, I can go into a few moreproblems I had with your character. You can take advice from it or ignore it all together. You know how I talked about fighting? Wasn't done. There are a few more inconsistencies with this character I'll split all this from every topic you covered. F1:
 * 1: The Fighting

Nature Manipulation/Chlorokinesis
First, you've already insinuated at fact that she's a master of chlorokinesis. She can make them appear out of thin air in specific sizes that she personally wants. Please explain how she is able to spawn buds and from there create leaves on any size. Please talk to me about this. She also can make

F2: Crystals

I'll give you credit that you probably didn't know how deep crystals are beneath the surface of the each (About 100-150 miles). But that doesn't explain how she is able to heat up and create pressure hard enough to form crystals and be able to put them in front of her or bring them up '''100-150 miles. '''They also change color depending on energy use, so now that she brings these crystals up they are magically bound to her through energy use? Her powers just make that happen without explanation? The color coding for that seems really pointless.

F3: Enhamced speed:

"He is a very fast runner, and when used with enough force, she can run as fast as a car on a highway! It is not superhuman speeds, but she has potential to reach superspeeds if she pushes herself a little harder. However, when she is not fighting crime, she isn't as fast." Running as fast as a car is superhuman. Unless superhuman to you isn't 65 miles per hour. The fastest a human can achieve at this point is apparently 27.44 mph. Also who are you comparing to when you say, "Christina happens to have faster speeds"?

F4: Beauty Javelin

Oh god where do I start. '''The ways she uses a javelin besies the typical way is wrong and shows me that you are trying to use javelins in a way that isn't possible. '''I want to guess the image of the bent javelin isn't supposed to be like that so I won't talk about it any further. A javelin's impact depends on the force of the user, which in this case you act as if it causes force on its own. This isn't some Caliburn-esque weapon; don't treat it like one. It's use a sword sound very stupid, as Javelin points are a cone shape while the tip and fuller of a sword are used for wind resistance when attacking/cutting. It can't be used the same without being countered by a reflect by an opponent. It's spinning attack can easily be countered as someone (which is basically everyone in the sonic universe) Can be countered with a grab, holding their arm in fornt of its spinner, or breaking it.

F5: Leaf Blade

In the paragraph talking about her Chlorokinesis, it never talks about her leaf blade. You might want to add that as it seems like its a more important use of energy than others. In a lower paragraph when you talk about her fighting, you talk about it as if there is one type of leaf blade, obviously not making it evident that there is a apparently the type that is longer and sharper? In what way is a leaf sharper and how does she do it? Why is it like a last resort when you have a stronger javelin that can also explode? Choose a main weapon and make it stronger than a leaf blade.

F6: Infinity Bottle

She has gained possession of it and now it only serves her as a person, I would like more information on where she found it, how the form works, how the bottle is only latched onto letting her use it, and how the heck it fits in a javelin.

1.2 Fighting Style:

Why did you say it's tremendous, are you fishing for compliements? Also, "even though she doesn't consider herself a fighter"? What does she consider herself as? A character that doesn't like fighting but has a moveset the size of Twelve from SF3:Third Strike?

F1: Elements

Her use of spontaneous creation really irks me and the crystal manipulation is badly written. When thinking about it a bit more, it's very useless. So is the plant manipulation as she is spontaneously creating whips from her hand and can manipulate the sizes of leaves even though leaves don't work like that. Making sharp leaves is also a very specific thing, which is more of a Red Holly attribute in bushes than trees.

F2: Acrobatics

Any character with decent speed is going to be able to catch her mid somersault and get the drop on her. Keep her acrobatics with her gymnastics.

F3: Street Fighting

Street fighting is not a self defense that can be taught, '''Street fighting is hand-to-hand combat in public places, between individuals or groups of people. Unlike sport fighting, a street fight might involve weapons, multiple opponents, and no rules. The venue is usually a public place (like a street) and the fight sometimes results in serious injury or occasionally even death. It is NOT A MARTIAL ART. YOU ARE ABLE TO USE MARTIAL ARTS IN STREET FIGHTNG, BUT IT IS NOT A MARTIAL ART ITSELF. THERE IS NO "TYPICAL STREET FIGHTING, NOR IS BEING A GYMNAST GOING TO HELP YOU, AS ITS A VERY DIFFERENT MEDIUM OF ART AND DOES NOT CORRELATE WITH THE CHAOS THAT STREET FIGHTING ENSURES. BEING A GYMNAST WILL NOT EASILY HELP HER LEARN NEW SKILLS, BECAUSE STREET FIGHTING ISNT A MARTIAL ART, ITS FIGHTING IN PUBLIC WITHOUT THE SETUP OF RULES, IDEALS, OR SPECIFIC CONDITIONS. '''

F4: Beauty Javelin (Again)

Why is she whacking with a javelin. Use a staff for that sort of thing or the hilt of a sword. SHE HAS MULTIPLE JAVELINS OF THE SAME CALIBER USING A TROPE? Stop it. SHE'S USING IT FOR SOMETHING OTHER THAN AN OFFENSIVE WEAPON? Stop it. A Javelin is for one thing; an offensive throwing weapon. Thats why a good tie-in with a javelin is some form of sheild than is a 2 for one kind of deal.