Board Thread:Fan Projects/@comment-5142578-20141021022420/@comment-5142578-20141029152626

MilezTailzPrower wrote: Also, I brought a little Shaun of the Dead (my favorite zombie movie) into it.

I'd rather you didn't do that, Milez. I already had a specific plot in mind, and that kinda takes away from it. Also, your edits are starting to complicate things. First, you seem to be jumping ahead to the next day (with the edit where you had Steve turn into a zombie after the night passed). Please stay with the time. The Talkplay hadn't even gotten to the next day; it is still at the time where it has only been a few minutes since the car actually hit the building.

Second, there isn't really a way a news feed would have been recording the scene only minutes after it happened. In fact, there really wouldn't be a news feed at all. I would like to ask that you please let me handle the media. This also goes for Richbob2, who had Transford return home drunk and turn on the news. The media won't be around long enough to even comment on a single car accident. It has other things to worry about.

Third, some of your edits just seem to have nothing to do with what is happening to the rest of the TP. It kind of makes the Talkplay look... choppy (for lack of a better word). Actually, 'disorganized' might be a better word for it. Your first edit (where you had Cyan and Akrozin talking about Akrozin having N.I.D.S) was a little out of place. And then just having Cyan wake up in an empty hospital is also quite out of place.

It doesn't look like you have much experience with roleplaying, so I'll try to cut you some slack on this. Just, please try to have a little more discretion when it comes to your edits. I recommend you try joining other roleplays to help build up your skills, and ask other users who have been at this for a while for some advice and tips. I don't want to sound like a jerk when I say this, but it may be necessary for me to remove some of your posts on the talkplay.