User blog comment:Detective SkullWolf/Character Critique Requests/@comment-4232858-20140228032835/@comment-27765057-20140305023433

NEXT!

As usual, I'll start with appearance. Now, for a lot characters that have an "unknown" species, you can usually identify their species just by looking at them. For this guy, I legitamitely have no idea what he could be. He looks unique, so props to you Scorps. I would like to know if that is him suited or without one.

Moving on to his hist- background information. This really isn't a history, it's just a list of facts about him. What really serves as his history is the first bullet, which states that nothing is really known about his origin. To be honest, I've never liked this concept. It tells me that you either haven't actually come up with a backstory yet or you are keeping it under wraps on to avoid spoiling it to people. If the second is true, then I STRONGLY advice you provide it anyway.

Next is personalit- background information again (seriously, you should seperate this section into history, trivia, and personality). His personality is addressed on the fourth, sixth, ninth, tenth, and his last two bullets. I feel that it could be fleshed out a bit more. Of course it could also be better improved if there was a history.

Let's talk about powers. He has quite a bit of different ones, perhaps too many. Personally I think he should have three at maximum, perhaps get rid of the heat vision and soul as those two expanded upon the least. I'd like an explanation for the origins of his powers, but again he has no history.

So in conclusion: he's interesting but could really use a backstory so we could learn more about him.