User blog comment:Awkwarddingo/Awkward Reviews by a Dingo/@comment-27765057-20140318004845/@comment-11848168-20140322021216

Alright. Let's get this wagon train a rolling!

First, personality. As you said, a stereotypical loner. Some lone wolves tend to get soft when someone is in danger. This guy is not one of them. He cares not for allies, but hey, he has common decency, so that counts for something. You seem to have added that part to shed light on him, but there seems to be no proof of being polite, snapping necks and all. His infatuation with hair almost made me think of him as a joke character. That, and he stole hair and stitched it on himself. That's crazy stuff, yo. Moving on, his tendency to switch sides points at his neutrality, but he also has some morals, which, again, he has no sign of. He snapped a mother's neck. Christ, man, he's cold. So I recommend deleting the mention of the morals that are nonexistent.

Next, his history, which I found compelling. He was dealt a bad hand. No mother, a crappy father, and twelve years in prison with the idea of execution hanging over his head. I liked the idea of the people who put him away for life, a guy who wasn't able to be executed because of deadly hair, to catch another dangerous guy, whose powers are not mentioned. So, in response to this, Ailion snaps his father's neck and Tyren's mother, but he lost Tyren. So, as a reward, the people who put him away and let him out to kill one guy is given two other possibly deadly prisoners to aid them.

The guys who runs Ailion's village are idiots. They went against every idea they set their rule upon to apprehend one criminal. And Ailion's an idiot for not snapping the ruler's necks. They only put a tracker on him, not a kill switch. I have the thought that you are setting up for a revolution story. This guy's history is not my favorite part of his article, obviously.

Thirdly, his powers. This is my favorite. His powers remind me of my anime hero, Bobobo Bobo Bobobo, who controlled hi nose hairs. This power has tons of potential. People would think it is stupid, controlling hair. This is an epic power, and I could not say anything negative about it. I will talk about his weakness too, I guess. It is very fitting. His powers are awesome, but are no match for some water and mud.

Final verdict: the only part of him I found very appealing are his powers. His personality is two faced and his history consists of the biggest idiots ever. You get enough points to get to the tootsie roll center of a toostsie pop.

Any question, please ask away. Stay classy!