Board Thread:Article Critique/@comment-1942179-20141231152256

Posting this now because I forgot that I skipped a week.

Here is the last of the Star Brothers. Out of the four, Zap is probably the one who hogged the most attention over the years. So far I think he's developed fairly well, with the only real problem being my laziness in writing out his backstory. Still, I'd like some secondary opinions, as usual.

(I really need to get off my butt and do some writing.) 