Thread:GalaxyWorld27/@comment-33279589-20180328074546/@comment-32712012-20180329050238

Hi Galaxy, and thanks for fixing some of the things on your character pages! Here are my updated analyses of your pages: I hope that this update will be helpful!
 * Yuki:
 * Everything here (including the History section, which got a lot better) is reasonably good. The sole exception is the Personality section, which should still be compressed. If you could compress that (and maybe let someone copyedit the page a bit), I think it would be a pretty good page!
 * Azmaria:
 * The Personality section is much better. Thanks for fixing that!
 * The Age section hasn't really gotten fixed. I'd still like if you could clarify what you mean when you say that "Azmaria is currently 3 years old and she has remain that age since and afterwards".
 * The Relationships section hasn't really gotten fixed either. I'd still like some clarification on precisely what the relationship between Azmaria and Bianca is.
 * Aside from what I've mentioned above, the page is fairly decent!
 * Madoka:
 * The page is OK. It could use some more content and clarifications, but it's OK for now.
 * Bianca:
 * First off, I know you didn't ask about her, but I mentioned about her before and you changed some stuff on her page, so I want to update my analysis. That said:
 * ...you still didn't clear up what the relationship between Azmaria and Bianca is. Clearing that up would be very useful.
 * Aside from that, everything on this page is still fine.

By the way, on a somewhat related note: When you said that I could help you on the Yuki and Bianca articles, what exactly were you saying that I could do? I wasn't sure if you meant that you wanted me to suggest more ideas or if you were saying that I could actually go in and change the articles to make them make more sense. If you could clear that up, I would appreciate that!