Board Thread:Article Critique/@comment-27032473-20190628044032/@comment-3038048-20190911103209

Ominous seems like an interesting character at first but I found his background cliche and melodramatic. I did not buy that Ominous does what he does because he was scarred from a bullying incident. Also, I feel like bullying doesn't fit in the Sonic franchise generally. Furthermore, I found it odd that he was bullied at school 10,000 years ago.

Therefore, I can not empathize with him and cannot really understand his motives. The concept of misunderstanding is a nice touch. Maybe you could build on that as his motive for revenge.

His character, abilities and appereance are all clear. Just try to avoid repeating yourself. I found that you kept mentioning him self-loathing several times.

I also found the song and lyrics surprisingly good. Well done.

Overall, the page is well written. I would suggest you do not repeat yourself, as I mentioned earlier, and avoid writing in the past tense. Use only the present tense. It's the correct way.